User blog comment:Galeforce's Wrath/The tales of a summoner/@comment-25002135-20140531090957

Like I promised, I took a look. Please dont take offense at anything I say, these are just my humble opinions.

Interesting start. You certainly have some good ideas ready for this story. I look forward to see where you take this.

Not much for me to comment on as of yet, but perhaps you could use an editor or someone to proofread your story? Getting grammar and such fixed up usually makes for an easier read, in my opinion. Sometimes I find myself stopping in the middle wondering if there was a better way to word a sentence, but that's probably just me being weird.

I'm not saying it's hard to read in the first place, or that you are bad a grammar, but as far as I know no one writes perfect rough drafts, and it's easy to miss mistakes when editing your own work. This is me speaking from my own experience, though.

Anyway, it feels bit rushed at the end there. It felt like it was going to be a mystery type story, but then you went on to explain what happened to some of the summoners (ie, they were imprisioned), so prossibly an action/adventure type story? We shall see.

So yeah. A story that takes place after the game that would technically be completed, and with the heroes missing the world is thrown into chaos. Again, I look forward to see where you go with this. Keep up the good work!