User blog comment:Selena & Lexida/Took me awhile but finished chapter 1 of my Bf tale/@comment-24927576-20150330205449

Besides the mention of it, perhaps a tad bit....too much like DxD? Selena doesn't need to be naked to heal the MC, that's just a trick of Rias' Powers (for fanservice). As far as I can tell her sword, Lexidia, is the focus for her healing.

From a cold, analytical standpoint, it seems more like you're writing a cross-over between the storyline of DxD with the characters of Brave Frontier, putting Selena, who for all purposes was a warrior for the people more then a meek and shy maiden. There's really an emphasis put on a "star-bound lovers, destined to be together" sort of vibe from the whole story. Now I am a huge fan of DxD, ranking it as roughly one of my favorite animes of all time, but in a story where the major plot-twists and turns are revealed in roughly the first few bits of the story, it shows poor planning on the whole thing. It'd be as if the Harry Potter series revealed what the mark on harry's head actually meant (as in what the 7th book reveals it to be) on the 4th chapter in the first book. The characters seem to be well-versed in their respective defining traits, but there's isn't much depth to them besides the *insert mysterious background here* of the 2 friends.

All in all, it's long but that doesn't neccesitate it being good. If you changed it up a bit and made it a bit more closer to what the story actually holds, I don't mind if Selena and Brian get together or anything like that. (Bear in mind, DxD succeeds well at what it does due to it having little censorship inside of japan, and thus being able to get away with A LOT of stuff. Here on the forums, unless I am wildly mistaken, there's a bit more rules on what can and cannot be said.) But the Tsundere/Meek trope has been done to death and doesn't really fit someone who has earned the title of "Gilles De Lava" in her Kingdom for the King himself.