User blog comment:Galeforce's Wrath/Lost Souls: Chapter 1/@comment-25002135-20141230200421

In my opinion, it's rather short, actually. Well, it's not much more than a prologue, so I can't really comment much.

Personally I think things go by rather quickly. The protag is on a airship, losing a war or something, dies, and is suddenly shoehorned into the world of BF.

Not that it's a bad thing, but I think it could use more description or something.

The conclusion wasn't tied to this wasn't very well done either; it feels like it should have kept going a bit longer. The way it just stops after the thought of a doctor/medic walking in is a bit disconcerting. Maybe end it with him passing out again, idk.

In any case, it's not a bad premise, so keep up the good work.