User blog comment:Judgement days plea/The right way to plea for your life 1/@comment-24927152-20150129223038/@comment-27948655-20150130042554

One word to improve your story.

Grammar.

Please make sure you capitalize and put commas at the correct time.

No offense but your story would be 10 times easier to read if you did that.

Otherwise your story gets a 8/10 would-read-again ranking