User blog comment:Judgement days plea/The right way to plea for your life 1/@comment-24927152-20150129223038

Some advice, constructive advice. this was good, but the story seemed a bit... lacking. In my opinion, take your time writing, and put some more detail into your work, and of course, proofread. This wasn't the best, nor was it the worst. Keep it up, and you can only improve from here on out.

If this seemed like I was being negative, then ignore this comment. Do what you think works, but I'm just saying, detail can make your story more appealing to anyone. *Thumbs Up*