User blog comment:Arata Shijima/Unnamed Comics: Chapter 1/@comment-25002135-20140531085632

Like I promised, a comment on your comic.

Hmm, what can I say? Not much to comment on when we only have 8 pages and no much is happening so far.

I'm not much of an artist as a doodler, so I won't comment too much on artwork. I do like the backgrounds, though.

The layout is more or less quite clear, it helps the flow of the story so far. The pacing is a little slow, but that may not necessarily be a bad thing. Hard to say at the moment.

Again, with only 8 pages so far I can't really comment on the story itself either. I flows pretty well as it is right now, we have the start of a story here Chong sets out on his adventure, trolls a thief and meets Key and Gale.

I am wondering how Key already knew Chongs name in page 6, though. The artwork before hand made it look like this is the first time they've met, but I could be wrong.

Also, the size of the page is a bit large for me, it makes reading it a bit difficult. Do you think you could resize the pages before uploading them? That would be appreciated.

All in all, with only 8 pages to see so far, I can't really comment on much. It's a promising start, though, so keep up the good work!