User blog comment:Linathan/Unit Spotlight: Frolic Emperor Kira/@comment-25160329-20150412010920/@comment-25160329-20150412195133

A bit more intensive than usual:

“but with” --> “but even with”

“only if he destroyed” --> “if he destroyed”

“…?” --> “?”

“Think Kira is the new Maxwell? I think not.” --> “While many consider Kira the new Maxwell, I do not.”

“Critical damage” --> “critical damage” (many times)

“Elemental Weakness” --> “elemental weakness” (many times)

“are Light and Dark” --> “are Light or Dark”

“your units with [crit spheres]” --> “spheres like [crit spheres] to your units”

“Critical Rate” --> “critical rate” (it’s not a stretch to say this appears 20 times at least)

“are encountering” --> “encounter”

“Secondly/Thirdly” --> “Second/Third”

“actually useless” --> “pointless”

“that, Kira” --> “that, but Kira”

“gets to utilize this ATK buff and apply it” --> “applies this ATK buff”

“Chances are” --> “It’s likely”

“could land” --> “will land”

“heavily rely” --> “rely”

Revise pgph. 1 of extra skill: “Kira’s ES has a low chance of reflecting a portion of damage. It does little damage, but its main purpose is to generate BC. It will sometimes finish a BB/SBB gauge, but it is unreliable.

Remove “If anything,” and recapitalize as needed

Remove quotation marks from ““high damage””

“Kira has a nice normal attack Drop Check of 24 BC.” --> “Kira’s normal attack has 24 DC, which is nice.”

“as this can” --> “as it can”

“Kira also has his BB dominating his foes.” --> “Kira’s BB can also dominate his foes.”

“against those type of enemies” --> “with those enemies”

Statements about an average DEF and high damage output don’t belong in the same sentence – they’re two different things

“Maxwell was a Critical Queen and she still is” --> “Maxwell is a critical queen, and Kira hasn’t changed this”

Cut out “for the metagame”

“one would have” --> “you need”

“achieve the full effect” --> “take full advantage”

“but can be used as a somewhat suicidal squad to use for dealing tons of damage” --> “but it can be useful in a suicide squad so that tons of damage can be dealt”

“authorities of Criticals” --> “authorities of criticals”

“King of Criticals” --> “king of criticals”

“his limitation” --> “the limitation”

“on what” --> “about what”

“to accomplish his” --> “to allow him to exact his”

The word "critical" is not a proper noun. Nor are "king", "queen", or "rate".

Come on, man/woman. It's disappointing.