Thread:Carol of the bells/@comment-27948655-20141130165621/@comment-5758632-20141130204142

So I read your blog--it's pretty good. I normally don't like giving advice simply because there is no one style for writing. Everyone has their own style, and you should do your best to develop your own.

There are a few tips I could give you, though. I noticed you took time to describe your unit's personality. That's fine, but in order to condense things, it's easier to describe them through the way they speak. For example, in my fanfic, Mifune talks like this: "....hmph. I wish you wouldn't use me as an example." This sets a certain tone for him, showing he doesn't like to talk, and is not very sociable. One more tip is the mood your style sets. Using curt and to-the-point words helps determine how serious you want the reader to feel. I'm honored you asked for my advice. I wish you the best in your writing. Thanks again~