User blog comment:Carol of the bells/Days of Ruin --- Zen's exile, part 5/@comment-25002135-20150122195750

Somehow, with the lack of a closing quotation mark the chapter feels very unfinished. I can understand that it's not a bad place stop at considering the brevity of your chapters, but that feeling is still there.

Again, all I can really recommend is having a proofreader go over your writing, but probably I'm just nitpicking at this point.

Anyway, since I still have aboue 20+ chapters to go through I'll read through them all instead of commenting on each one individually like I had originally planned to do, lol.