User blog comment:Carol of the bells/Days of Ruin --- Zen's exile, part 8/@comment-25002135-20150122200823

I take back what I said in my last comment, because I really want to comment here, lol

It as you said in another comment here, Zen's development is rather rushed now. There are quite a number of things I could point out that bothered me:

If someone claims to know true strength, it doesn't mean it's true. Considering Zen's massive pride, I personally find it more likely that Zen would brush it off considering how weak she thought Sergio was, especially since the "true strength" he is display now is losing to Zen.

Of course, there are various ways that could go about this; in here, you decided that Zen was already wavering thanks to her losing battle with Karl, so her pride was already a bit weak.

Still, I'm having trouble believing that Zen's pride would allow her to display such weakness towards someone she was already beating, but at the same time there's Sergio's determination...

Basically, what I'm getting at is, I believe that this kind of scene requires quite a bit of detail and background info. It could also clear up a number of things as well.

Anyway, keep up the good work!