User blog comment:Carol of the bells/Days of Ruin --- Zen's exile, part 2/@comment-25002135-20150115051729

Okay, here's my review on this chapter.

In the last chapter, I made a comment about using the term 'unit', but I can see clearly that Zen is a summoner, which makes terminology a bit harder to use. Well, I guess ally or subordinate still work, though, but you can disregard what I said about it earlier. And minion sounds even worse, even if it does seem more accurate. Since I'm kind of stuck myself, I guess I'll let it slide for now.

Anyway, continuing on. Some grammatical errors here and there, but nothing that can't be fixed. Like I said before, getting a proofreader would be great. It's always difficult to catch one's own mistakes, since one would be familiar with what they just wrote, after all.

In regards to the rest of the chapter, it was enjoyable. I'm not sure about the time skip—again, it does make things do seem a bit rushed, especially with how short the chapters are at the moment.

Anyway, keep up the good work!