User blog comment:Tartarus Scythe Ender/Unit Spotliught:Lancelot/@comment-26140304-20170425063508

I'm a bit late on the scene of reading this Unit Spotlight. Normally, I don't provide my thoughts on other people's unit reviews since everyone is entitled to their own opinions and everyone is entitled to do things their way. Since this was requested for me to take a look at a unit review of Lancelot, I shall provide my thoughts on it as such. There is going to be a lot to cover so take these points as constructive criticism.


 * Formatting
 * Definitely needs a lot of work. It looks outright messy upon first look. Everything looks jumbled up and it's not good for people's eyes to read it closely.
 * If you would like to use a template to better organize your work, you may use my Unit Spotlight 7-Star+ Template:

I have strong faith that you can improve with these points. It's been a long while since I wrote reviews and looking back, I definitely wished I did more of what I mentioned above. While these points might sound a bit harsh, it is by no means a detrimental component of your analysis. We all learn from mistakes and improve so we can minimize these mistakes as much as possible. You have a long way to go to improve this analysis, but it isn't impossible to do so.
 * Analysis
 * There needs to be more of this. So far, the descriptions don't seem to convince me why the unit is good or bad. Be objective, and avoid talking too casually. You can write in a casual manner, but avoid doing stuff like "So yeah, nothing more to say", "so yeah, that aside", etc.
 * When I mean "be objective", try not to use uncertainty words like "I think this" and so and so. It doesn't give a definite bulk to your analysis that way and it doesn't give the reader a good reason to continue reading due to it. Be firm when you're doing analysis.
 * Needs less summary, more analysis. Overall, it's just rehashing whatever was written in the description of the unit's LS, BB, SBB, UBB, and ES. For example, you talk about the 150% Spark buff and the 2-3 BC BB-on-Spark buff being good, but there lacks reason why it's good. Also, talk about how the buffs can help with squad efficiency. You touch upon this, but it was lacking a little in certain areas. For the "Overall" section, what I generally liked to do is to do a slight recap and explain some usability aspects of certain units.
 * Touch upon more advanced mechanics. This might be a bit far off since the wiki currently lacks information like damage distribution and attack frames (We're planning to add damage distributions to unit pages soon!), but touching upon this would definitely explain how a unit might perform well in certain content. For example, touching upon how Lancelot has a Movement Speed of 4 with a relatively consistent attack animation will definitely help to improve the bulk of your analysis. My Unit Spotlights heavily lacked this, which is why I wasn't satisfied with them in the end.

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